Got my response/critique back from Sione Aeschliman late tonight. I have got to ponder on it some. The biggest part of the critique is very helpful and has to do with Aubrey’s motives and stakes. It is honestly something I’ve been tweaking over time anyway and have some ideas on how to improve.
The other things she offered in the critique? I’m not as sure how helpful they are. We have scheduled a Skype video call next Monday, May 22nd. I will reserve more judgment until then and will give her a chance to respond before saying anything critical.